Wednesday, March 14, 2012

Playing around with a novel I'm writing, this is a snippet, and I invite criticism




As I don't want to litter the blog with evolving bits of that novel, I am replacing that excerpt with a new meme.  I'll post something new in that storyline once I've updated it.
Posted by SanyoSoup at 9:29 PM
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Anonymous said...

Throw some action and description of the setting in to give an idea of what's happening. Are they at a bar, a beach, someone's back yard?

The longer bouts of dialogue can be split up to be a bit more effective. Say part of it, have your character reflect, take a drag on a cigarette, look around, notice something insignificant happening elsewhere, something that shows he is thinking of how to get his point across before finishing it.

If it can at all be taken to be "truth in the guise of a novel", think about the people who could be affected. Say what you feel, but feel what you say.

Post an update - this would be interesting to follow.

3:37 AM
SanyoSoup said...

Thanks!

Those are all excellent suggestions. It does need atmospherics added to it, to set the scene. The conversation is taking place in a vacuum at this point. And between strangers the reader knows nothing about.

I end up having to get down the dialog first, then come in and back-fill those other elements not so much as an afterthought, but because I seem to be able to make it flow more smoothly that way.

It isn't "truth in the guise of a novel", although I can see how it might be interpreted that way. Especially because I don't have any context built around it here. But it is *not* intended to be about anyone I know, knew, etc.

It is a fictional depiction of human interaction, with an emphasis on the psychology behind it, and under no circumstances should it be interpreted otherwise.

4:32 PM

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